Sorry But You're Dead To Me (original)

[Laurens]

Written this afternoon

 

[Laurens]

Not really worth another topic, but here's me fiddling with a wah wah pedal too:

 

[CosmicJoghurt]

Allow me to comment, since I'm a bit of a music tinkerer myself

First off, I feel you should invest in some recording equipment. Having chops is the real deal but not-so-good-sounding audio is a deterrent.

With that out of the way, onto the music:

Me likey your style. I think your voice sounds a lot better on lower tones than it does when you start climbing up the octave ladder. Not only is it more in-tune, you're more comfortable there. I feel you should work a bit on your singing, specially intonation.

Also, you know those chord changes in the end? Yeah they're a bit too late for meh-taste, you spend a lot of time on the E7/A7 thing.

Details aside, I like your attitude on the Bob Dylan thing.


I hope I'm not coming out as too much of a critic, but I just like telling people what I think.

Cheers!

 

[Laurens]

Allow me to comment, since I'm a bit of a music tinkerer myself

First off, I feel you should invest in some recording equipment. Having chops is the real deal but not-so-good-sounding audio is a deterrent.

Yeah I'm very aware of this problem, unfortunately my financial situation won't allow me to get hold of any decent recording equipment at the moment

With that out of the way, onto the music:

Me likey your style. I think your voice sounds a lot better on lower tones than it does when you start climbing up the octave ladder. Not only is it more in-tune, you're more comfortable there. I feel you should work a bit on your singing, specially intonation.

Yeah, I certainly feel more comfortable around the lower end. I probably do need some work on my singing, although I certainly feel like I have improved since I started singing, and I've received quite a few comments to that effect. I can do a pretty good Johnny Cash

Also, you know those chord changes in the end? Yeah they're a bit too late for meh-taste, you spend a lot of time on the E7/A7 thing.

I was thinking that this song possibly needed a bit of a reworking. I wanted to keep the end part separate because the theme is different (lyrically) from the rest of the song, but I could try to work in some variation in the verses.

Details aside, I like your attitude on the Bob Dylan thing.


I hope I'm not coming out as too much of a critic, but I just like telling people what I think.

Cheers!

No worries, I appreciate criticism (at least in its constructive form as in your post).

Thanks for the comment

Laurens