Bendraconis
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I saw Saul's story so i decided to show my own efforts on the writing front. Hope you like it. Here it is.
The wind whispered its secrets to the branches of the trees and the two moons shone down onto a mirror that rippled as the wind gushed and eddied. Ivan ran. His clothes tore upon brambles which scratched against his face as he raced away. Ivan slowed, as he looked behind him a ragged breath caught in his throat. He listened intently for the tell-tale sounds of any followers. He breathed heavily as he slid down the corpse golden birch. The dry earth billowed in plumes of dust as he laid his weary body down. The light from the two moons shone down upon him. The moon illuminated his face but could not penetrate the dark shadowy hollows of his eyes. His eyes flickered and the sleep carried him upon downy wings into darkness.
He awoke to a steel sword which had been thrust against his throat, the icy tip resting like a viper against his skin. The man holding it was tall and thin and wore a uniform of dark black velvet. These robes billowed around him as he stood looking down at Ivan. “You have been found guilty of an act of faith and of fleeing justice.” The tall man stated calmly. Ivan gulped; he knew what happened to those who believed and spoke out for their faith. He stood, sword still pressed against his throat and walked forwards down into the pinioning arms of another man also wearing the long black robes. A wooden cudgel smashed down upon his head and the world went dark.
He awoke to pain. Soft sensuous burning pain. Ivan opened his eyes he tried to stand; his hands pushed down on cold stone and then were forced back by chains he could not see.The robed man stood in front of Ivan,before turning his back on Ivan as he bent down. With a crackle of sparks fire had been kindled in the hearth. Which burnt bright and hot but was too far away to alleviate the burning cold of the marble slab. The fire was the only illumination as it flickered across the bare stone walls.Iron pokers glowed cherry red in the flame. The man lifted a poker, turned and looked at Ivan.
“Do you wish to accept the charges given?” Ivan kept still not moving a muscle knowing it would be foolish to do so. The poker crept closer and closer to his skin till it made blistering contact. His skin blackened and smouldered the poker was removed and the harbinger of death stepped forward and rubbed an abrasive granular powder into the weeping wound. Mind shattering pain erupted as it dissolved inside the body.
“This could end with no more bloodshed. Just tell me. Do you accept the charge?” He asked again as he returned the poker to the brimstone, his uniform swished as he turned to the hearth. As he stoked the flames sparks climbed higher shedding a faint glow and revealing a wooden door darkened and pitted with age. The tip of the poker was white hot and as the tall gaunt man lifted it closer and closer to Ivan’s eye. Beads of sweat rolled down his face as the poker loomed close and closer filling his vision with its glowing tip.
“Do you wish to see? Or shall your faith save you?” He asked Ivan mockingly. Ivan looked past the poker and into his face. A face that held no earthly fear just acceptance of life and of the world. He decided to say nothing because he had always been taught to accept his lot in life. The man looked at Ivan,then with savage glee plunged the poker into his face.
Upon impact the eye was pulverized and one half of the world went black. Thick slimy jelly slid down his face. The white hot poker burnt through layer upon layer of skin filling Ivan’s nostrils with the stench of burnt flesh. Blood boiled as the wound was instantly cauterised. A roar of pure pain erupted from Ivan lips. Ivan whimpered as the dull throb of pain set in. He laid the poker to rest away from the flame. Shelves protruded from the walls laden with knives, hammers, nails and bottles of exotically coloured powders and liquids. From one of these shelves the man picked up a scalpel its blade glinting in the firelight.
“You have forgone a chance of repentance. I shall now have the honor of breaking you down and building you back up in our image.” The man leaned over Ivan with flames burning in his eyes. The scalpel descended and cut a line down his arm up to the base of his hand, his other limbs were treated thusly and then the man’s hands descended parting skin from flesh. A ruby dripped from the end of the scalpel.
The wind whispered its secrets to the branches of the trees and the two moons shone down onto a mirror that rippled as the wind gushed and eddied. Ivan ran. His clothes tore upon brambles which scratched against his face as he raced away. Ivan slowed, as he looked behind him a ragged breath caught in his throat. He listened intently for the tell-tale sounds of any followers. He breathed heavily as he slid down the corpse golden birch. The dry earth billowed in plumes of dust as he laid his weary body down. The light from the two moons shone down upon him. The moon illuminated his face but could not penetrate the dark shadowy hollows of his eyes. His eyes flickered and the sleep carried him upon downy wings into darkness.
He awoke to a steel sword which had been thrust against his throat, the icy tip resting like a viper against his skin. The man holding it was tall and thin and wore a uniform of dark black velvet. These robes billowed around him as he stood looking down at Ivan. “You have been found guilty of an act of faith and of fleeing justice.” The tall man stated calmly. Ivan gulped; he knew what happened to those who believed and spoke out for their faith. He stood, sword still pressed against his throat and walked forwards down into the pinioning arms of another man also wearing the long black robes. A wooden cudgel smashed down upon his head and the world went dark.
He awoke to pain. Soft sensuous burning pain. Ivan opened his eyes he tried to stand; his hands pushed down on cold stone and then were forced back by chains he could not see.The robed man stood in front of Ivan,before turning his back on Ivan as he bent down. With a crackle of sparks fire had been kindled in the hearth. Which burnt bright and hot but was too far away to alleviate the burning cold of the marble slab. The fire was the only illumination as it flickered across the bare stone walls.Iron pokers glowed cherry red in the flame. The man lifted a poker, turned and looked at Ivan.
“Do you wish to accept the charges given?” Ivan kept still not moving a muscle knowing it would be foolish to do so. The poker crept closer and closer to his skin till it made blistering contact. His skin blackened and smouldered the poker was removed and the harbinger of death stepped forward and rubbed an abrasive granular powder into the weeping wound. Mind shattering pain erupted as it dissolved inside the body.
“This could end with no more bloodshed. Just tell me. Do you accept the charge?” He asked again as he returned the poker to the brimstone, his uniform swished as he turned to the hearth. As he stoked the flames sparks climbed higher shedding a faint glow and revealing a wooden door darkened and pitted with age. The tip of the poker was white hot and as the tall gaunt man lifted it closer and closer to Ivan’s eye. Beads of sweat rolled down his face as the poker loomed close and closer filling his vision with its glowing tip.
“Do you wish to see? Or shall your faith save you?” He asked Ivan mockingly. Ivan looked past the poker and into his face. A face that held no earthly fear just acceptance of life and of the world. He decided to say nothing because he had always been taught to accept his lot in life. The man looked at Ivan,then with savage glee plunged the poker into his face.
Upon impact the eye was pulverized and one half of the world went black. Thick slimy jelly slid down his face. The white hot poker burnt through layer upon layer of skin filling Ivan’s nostrils with the stench of burnt flesh. Blood boiled as the wound was instantly cauterised. A roar of pure pain erupted from Ivan lips. Ivan whimpered as the dull throb of pain set in. He laid the poker to rest away from the flame. Shelves protruded from the walls laden with knives, hammers, nails and bottles of exotically coloured powders and liquids. From one of these shelves the man picked up a scalpel its blade glinting in the firelight.
“You have forgone a chance of repentance. I shall now have the honor of breaking you down and building you back up in our image.” The man leaned over Ivan with flames burning in his eyes. The scalpel descended and cut a line down his arm up to the base of his hand, his other limbs were treated thusly and then the man’s hands descended parting skin from flesh. A ruby dripped from the end of the scalpel.