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Bit of a story

SCRulerView

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This is for one of the facets of my sci-fi storyline. It consists of a number of universes. I don't necessarily believe in soul, but what I have wrote here is nice for a plot point. Here I go. Criticize if you want.

Approx. 2 million years ago (that's what I've always understood, if you have a correction then give it to me) we evolved to a generally close state to where we are now. Intelligence was our gift, but true sapience was a little ways away. Once it developed, it became slightly clear that it wasn't exactly limited to the brain. After brain death, it released from the body from whence it came, and manifested as pure Psionic energy, a unique form of energy that is characteristic of brainwave pattern. the ions that consisted conscious thought changed into this concentration.
It wasn't much longer after the first released souls began to realise that, despite their numbers growing, they were existing in a dimension that wasn't suited to them. They couldn't do anything meaningful.
First they decided to explore. They gathered information about their universe, and tapped their wonderful, near-unlimited powers to make sure they were hindered as little as possible. However, even after their search for knowledge, they could not interact totally with the physical universe. They could not reach their descendants, still limited to the third dimension.
Thus they decided to make a place for themselves.
They roved at will through the dimensions and finally found a place suitable for themselves to remake.
It was, at the time of discovery, wholly empty. With their power they changed it into a realm where they could fully interact. And they made sure that their descendants, when they came to their time, would know where to go. They made this place at the intersection of all universes. All souls from all realms would come here.
And thus centuries passed by. Suddenly, a powerful, frightening thing had happened.
The alpha male was no longer the most fit. Hundreds were being led by unfit kings and rulers. And suddenly, organized religion shaped itself and slithered into society. Those souls that came after were lost and confused, expecting retribution or reward after their years of fruitless worship and sacrifice. The souls that had come before did their best to bring them to the right path and make them realize that this was not the case.
However, some souls that came to what had now been dubbed by the souls "OtherSide" were surprised to see what they had stumbled upon.
They were also enraged.
Discovering that it was by the powers of the psionic entities, driven by pure will, that created this dimensional spiritual crawlspace, they decided they wanted a place for themselves. They would shape their Heaven in the same way that the others made OtherSide. But that was not enough. They knew that the other souls would go to OtherSide, unless they were so indoctrinated...
They had to make OtherSide become Hell.
There was a war that lasted for centuries. Of course, those of OtherSide won a small victory, but something strange happened. The souls evolved further.
They could interact, albeit in an extremely limited fashion, with the physical realms. It drained them of extreme amounts of energy but they could do things. Those of OtherSide attempted to make contact, but most of the time all they could pull off was presence of small energy orbs or voices on a tape recorder saying "I'm losing my energy."
The war still continued though, in a different form.
The decievers, however, had much deeper and stronger reserves of energy. Powered by the sheer will of hate and anger and the search for power and dominion, they pooled their ability, and caused the various afflictions and so-called Miracles, in order to strengthen people's misguided faith so that the souls of these people would come to the decievers' realm. The war continues to this day.
 
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SCRulerView said:
This is for one of the facets of my sci-fi storyline. It consists of a number of universes. I don't necessarily believe in soul, but what I have wrote here is nice for a plot point. Here I go. Criticize if you want.

Approx. 2 million years ago (that's what I've always understood, if you have a correction then give it to me) we evolved to a generally close state to where we are now. Intelligence was our gift, but true sapience was a little ways away. Once it developed, it became slightly clear that it wasn't exactly limited to the brain. After brain death, it released from the body from whence it came, and manifested as pure Psionic energy, a unique form of energy that is characteristic of brainwave pattern. the ions that consisted conscious thought changed into this concentration.
It wasn't much longer after the first released souls began to realise that, despite their numbers growing, they were existing in a dimension that wasn't suited to them. They couldn't do anything meaningful.
First they decided to explore. They gathered information about their universe, and tapped their wonderful, near-unlimited powers to make sure they were hindered as little as possible. However, even after their search for knowledge, they could not interact totally with the physical universe. They could not reach their descendants, still limited to the third dimension.
Thus they decided to make a place for themselves.
They roved at will through the dimensions and finally found a place suitable for themselves to remake.
It was, at the time of discovery, wholly empty. With their power they changed it into a realm where they could fully interact. And they made sure that their descendants, when they came to their time, would know where to go. They made this place at the intersection of all universes. All souls from all realms would come here.
And thus centuries passed by. Suddenly, a powerful, frightening thing had happened.
The alpha male was no longer the most fit. Hundreds were being led by unfit kings and rulers. And suddenly, organized religion shaped itself and slithered into society. Those souls that came after were lost and confused, expecting retribution or reward after their years of fruitless worship and sacrifice. The souls that had come before did their best to bring them to the right path and make them realize that this was not the case.
However, some souls that came to what had now been dubbed by the souls "OtherSide" were surprised to see what they had stumbled upon.
They were also enraged.
Discovering that it was by the powers of the psionic entities, driven by pure will, that created this dimensional spiritual crawlspace, they decided they wanted a place for themselves. They would shape their Heaven in the same way that the others made OtherSide. But that was not enough. They knew that the other souls would go to OtherSide, unless they were so indoctrinated...
They had to make OtherSide become Hell.
There was a war that lasted for centuries. Of course, those of OtherSide won a small victory, but something strange happened. The souls evolved further.
They could interact, albeit in an extremely limited fashion, with the physical realms. It drained them of extreme amounts of energy but they could do things. Those of OtherSide attempted to make contact, but most of the time all they could pull off was presence of small energy orbs or voices on a tape recorder saying "I'm losing my energy."
The war still continued though, in a different form.
The decievers, however, had much deeper and stronger reserves of energy. Powered by the sheer will of hate and anger and the search for power and dominion, they pooled their ability, and caused the various afflictions and so-called Miracles, in order to strengthen people's misguided faith so that the souls of these people would come to the decievers' realm. The war continues to this day.

I'm having little difficulty in reading your work. It seldom brings out an image where I wish to see what you're talking about. Keep it up and revise it again and again. :D
 
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